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Some people believe that the rise of AI in education has improved learning outcomes for students. Others argue that AI can be a distraction and negatively impact

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 artificial intelligence in
education
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 is thought by some to be a beneficial change for
students
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, other people think it can be detrimental. With technology, learners can learn their studies more
effective
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 than classic methods and
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 have the freedom to choose when and where they learn, but
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also
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there are drawbacks to be taken into account. On the one hand, there are a number of upsides to introducing AI into
education
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.
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, it is a powerful tool to engage
students
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. To put it in another way,
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 technology, learners can learn some lessons visually by watching them in the form of 3D that leads to more interesting content and
according to
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 an article that was published by the University of Oxford, about 70% of
students
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 learn their lessons more efficiently
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 they watch visual materials in videos rather than in books.
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, people of all ages can learn anything they tend to do, at their place
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instead
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 of participating in
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 classes. To
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 clarify, some individuals in deprived areas cannot reach educational equipment,
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 they can be taught everywhere
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 every time they want to,
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 there are no restrictions on their
education
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.
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,
students
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also
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 learn skills which are used for their future job
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Due to
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 the dependency of most jobs on technology, if people learn to work with computers, they will have more job opportunities. In conclusion, learners can find
education
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 interesting and have
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access
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 to educational content instantly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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