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The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.

The line graph illustrates the average time spent on manufacturing cars by General
Motors
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, Ford,
Toyota
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 and
Honda
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 at their US factories from 1998 to 2005.
Overall
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, the diagram shows that General
Motors
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 spent more
hours
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 to produce vehicles in the US factory, whilst
car
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production
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 in
Toyota
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 and
Honda
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 companies took fewer
hours
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 between 1998 and 2005. In 1998, General
Motors
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 and Ford were the two slowest
car
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production
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 companies, spending 28
hours
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 and 32
hours
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 , respectively , to produce a
car
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. In comparison, it only took around 22
hours
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 for
Toyota
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 and
Honda
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 to manufacture a vehicle in 1998.
While
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production
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 time reduced gradually in General
Motors
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 to 22
hours
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 per
car
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 by 2005, Ford took longer
hours
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 to produce cars. It reached a peak of 31
hours
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 per vehicle in 2001, before experiencing a significant decline to just below 20
hours
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 per
car
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 in 2005. Both
Toyota
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 and
Honda
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production
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 rates fluctuated throughout the period. Both consumed longer
hours
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 to produce cars, with a figure of about 24
hours
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 per vehicle in 2002. Both companies saw an increase in their manufacturing rate again to 20
hours
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 per automobile.

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