The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.

The shown line chart illustrates the average
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that four vehicle companies spent in order to produce cars at American factories.
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, it is apparent that all manufacturers spent less time in factories in 2005, compared to the
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early
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years.
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, the General
Motor
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Motors
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company had the most time spent in 1998, with 32
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per vehicle in the factory.
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, the production
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reduced significantly in 8 years, and landed on 22
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per car.
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, the only company
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experienced an upward trend in the period of 1999 to 2001
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was the Ford brand
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rose gradually from 28
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to around 31. Same as General
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, they dropped swiftly over
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the years
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. With Toyota and Honda, there were more fluctuations happening. Both companies started at 22
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. Toyota rose moderately,
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Honda plummeted sharply.
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, similar to their tied starting
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, both factories spent around 20
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to produce cars in 2005.

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