The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below illustrate
road
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access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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Overall
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Overall,
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what stands out from the maps is that many significant changes have taken place during the three years
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, by
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by
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including
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the constructing
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constructing
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construction
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a
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of a
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public car park and a bus station. There wasn’t any roundabout near
hospital
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the hospital
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in 2007,
while
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two roundabouts were built in the north and south of the hospital
road
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respectively
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, to make a way for connecting streets together efficiently. It is notable that there were six bus stops along the hospital
road
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in the west and east of it, but they were demolished
and
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a new bus station was built to the west of hospital avenue in 2010
and
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it was connected to roundabouts. There was
car
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a car
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park for both staff and public, which was located to the east of the hospital
road
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in 2007, but it was considered for staff only, and a big public car park was erected to the east of the city hospital in 2010.
the
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The
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ring lane around the hospital remained unchanged during the period in question.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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