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Band 6.5

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate
accessing
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 to
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city
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the city
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 hospital by a
road
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 in 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, what stands out from
image
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the image
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 is that some significant changes took place in the
city
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 during
3
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the 3
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years. The
city
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 hospital
which
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, which
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 was surrounded by the Ring
Road
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 was remained unchanged
but
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, but
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 two roundabouts were erected on the north and south of the Hospital Rd
,
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;
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therefore
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, the northern one linked two
side
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sides
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 of the Ring
Road
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, when
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when
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while
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 the southern one is in the middle of the
city
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Road
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, the bus stops were demolished around the Hospital Rd and
instead
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 of them a bus station was constructed on the right hand of the Hospital Rd which was linked to both roundabouts by two different ways,
on the other hand
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, public car park got separate from staff car park to make more space for staffs’ cars
while
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 public car park was introduced on the east side of the
City
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 hospital which its entrance was opened to Ring
Road
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, road with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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