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Band 5.5

The two maps compare the same sporting center of a specific university in 2007 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps illustrate
plan
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the plan
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 of a
sporting
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sports
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center
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centre
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 of a university in 2007 and
present
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the present
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.
Overall
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, the porting
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center
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centre
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 witnessed developments in both sports and healthcare facilities,
while
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 some sections remained unchanged.
Moreover
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, the total area has been increased significantly to make these developments possible. In 2007, there
were
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was
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 a football pitch
at
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in
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 the northern part of the
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center
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centre
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, covered in grass for football matches.
the
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The
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 middle section was for a swimming pool, tennis court, and health
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center
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centre
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, with a sports hall providing access to these sporting facilities. The southern part was for three temporary teaching huts. By present, the football pitch has been developed significantly by adding a running track around the main pitch and changing the grass surface into an
all-whether
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all-weather
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 one.
In addition
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, the middle section has been modified by expanding the original building,
and
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apply
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transforming the tennis court into a squash court, and
a
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building a
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bigger sports hall.
Furthermore
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,
while
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 the swimming pool
was
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apply
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remained unchanged, the health
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center
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centre
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 was moved under the swimming pool and expanded notably. The teaching huts
has
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have
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 been removed completely and turned into three newly
build
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built
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 buildings, namely:
injury
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the injury
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 clinic,
lab
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the lab
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, and
teachers'
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the teachers'
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 office.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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