The charts below give information about the amount of time children spend with their parents.

The chart below illustrates the result of three surveys on how many people were absent in a European country in the years from 2000, 2005 and 2010.
Overall
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, the proportion of
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employees
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who did not go to work
due to
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illness was higher than other reasons. The family responsibility was in
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second place after people's absenteeism in the survey. Other reasons were a small amount of use from
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the community
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to not go to work. In 2000, the absence rates
were changing
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depending on how workers would respond in order not to go to work. Stress was the least reason that
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would use to excuse themself from the workplace. The proportion of responses was about 6 per cent , rather than other responses that got more than 10 per cent.
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, the percentage changed
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the years. In 2005 and 2010, the accusations of family responsibilities were the same.
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, it
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turned out to be the same number of absences in these years , but with unexpected problems.

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