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Band 6

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps illustrate the changes in the bookstore layout between
year
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the year
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 2000 and now. Major differences in the arrangement alongside new inclusions like seating and
cafe
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a cafe
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 are noted. Over the years, the travel and new
books
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 sections were
the
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apply
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close to the entrance
and
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, and
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 there
has
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have
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 been no changes in the store arrangement to the travel, new
books
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 and service desk sections
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while
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, while
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 the rest of the store underwent obvious rearrangement. The middle of the room used to house
books
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 about art, hobbies and
cookery
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cookery,
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have be
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has been
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 upgraded to a seating area
thats
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that
constituted
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consists
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 of 3 tables and 4 chairs each.
Also
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, the left wall that previously housed only
fiction
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 has been divided into 4 sections for
books
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 on art, hobbies, cookery and
fiction
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 respectively. The back wall that used to hold more
fiction
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books
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 has now been converted to an exclusive non-
fiction
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 area.
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, the right side of the store
beyond
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, beyond
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 the service area that used to hold
non
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non-fiction
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fiction
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books
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books,
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 is now an in-house cafe.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, fiction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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