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Write a report with this question: The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011.

The bar graph shows the media
type
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types
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 that are used to update daily news across
age
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 groups in a country
on
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in
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 2011.
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that
radio
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 was the main source of news among different
age
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 groups, except for the 10-
17 years old
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17-year-olds
.
By contrast
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,
micro blogging
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 was consistently the lowest across generations. Despite the huge disparity in social networks and
micro blogging
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microblogging
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 proportions, both experienced similar trends. To be precise, social networks and
micro blogging
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microblogging
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 stood at exactly 80 per cent and 20 per cent, respectively, and remained roughly stable in earlier
age
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 categories, before progressively decreasing and
hit
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 the troughs in the
65 years old
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65-year-old
 group. As for the
radio
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,
only
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apply
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less than half
proportion
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apply
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of
people
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the people
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with
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aged
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age
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 10-17 used
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radio
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the radio
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 as their source of daily news.
However
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, the
radio
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 usage doubled its initial proportion in the following generations. After reaching just above 90 per cent in
18
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the 18
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-29
age
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 category, the trend
then
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 plateaued among
millenials
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millennials
 and
generation
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Generation
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 X, before showing a slight fall to just below 90 in the oldest
age
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 group.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, radio with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • media usage
  • age groups
  • digital media
  • traditional media
  • preferences
  • news consumption
  • social media
  • online news
  • newspapers
  • television
  • balance of media
  • demographics
  • reliance
  • trend
  • engagement
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