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Band 6.5

The map show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The
map
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depict
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depicts
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about
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apply
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the present layout of an office and redevelopment ideas
of
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for
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 it in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there was a considerable change in the areas of grass in both eastern and western
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side
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sides
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 of
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map
Correct article usage
the map
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 will have some places to spend
leasure
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leisure
 time and enjoy
lauch
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lunch
 time.
Moreover
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, more
offices
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 will be added. As the first
map
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 reveals, there are open
spend
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spaces
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 that are filled with grass
in
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on
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left
Correct article usage
the left
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 and right
side
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 of the
map
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 and left
side
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 of it contains
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entrance
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an entrance
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 gate.
The
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On the
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 north
side
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 of
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entrance
Correct article usage
the entrance
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there
Punctuation problem
, there
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 are
kitchen
Correct article usage
a kitchen
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,
canteen
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a canteen
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 and storeroom
and
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, and
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 WCs
is
Verb problem
apply
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located beside
storeroom
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the storeroom
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. The
south east
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southeast
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side
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 of
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map
Correct article usage
the map
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 has another
entrance
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 left next to
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entrance
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the entrance
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is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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offices
Correct article usage
the offices
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. In the future,
kitchen
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the kitchen
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 and canteen will be replaced with
offices
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,
whereas
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storeroom
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the storeroom
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 will remain
same
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the same
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. The eastern
side
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 of
grass
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the grass
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 will have
coffee
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a coffee
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 machine
in
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at
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top
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the top
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 and meeting areas
in
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at
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bottom
Correct article usage
the bottom
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 with chairs.
Similarly
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,
western
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the western
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side
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 of
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map
Correct article usage
the map
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 will have
outdoor
Correct article usage
an outdoor
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 seating area and some chairs and
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Entrance
Correct article usage
the Entrance
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 gate
will
Verb problem
is
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 expected to
build
Wrong verb form
be built
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in
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apply
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between two big
offices
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, side, offices, entrance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 6 times.
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