IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 2

(VMN)Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railway and trams. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a view that most of the
fundsshould
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funds should
 be spent on public
conveyingsystems
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transportation systems
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.
Whilesome
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While some
 oppose
thisnotion
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this notion
. I personally argue in favour, astransitis very vital for citizens.It is not necessary to distribute
salaryfor
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salary for
 shipment, as it is not efficient and time-consuming. When
capitalis
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capital is
 used to
improvepublic
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improve public
 transit, most of it is wasted on modifying
vehiclesand
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vehicles and
 not
onimprovingineffective
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on improving ineffective
 lines.
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, it is shown that there
aremanybetter
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are many better
 ways to
spendcheck
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spend a check
, with
transitbeing
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transit being
 the worst one of them.
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, proving that it is not
recommendedto
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recommended to
 use
cashon
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cash for
 the
improvementof
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improvement of
 passage.haulingshould be funded, as it has several benefits. When
transitisfunded
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transit is funded
, the
environmentand
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environment and
 traffic congestion
areimproved
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are improved
.
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, in
high-pollutioncities
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high-pollution cities
 well-developed
freightagesystem
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freightage system
 has
decreasedpollution levelsand
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decreased pollution levels and
 improved air quality. Seldom do people
fundcartingsystem
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fund carting systems
;
therefore
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, it is better to give
bill
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a bill
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.In conclusion, there is a view that the
publicsystem
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public system
 should be funded.
Whilesome
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While some
 argue that it is better to use funds in other areas. I firmly believe it is ,
asit
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as it
 brings a lot of benefits.

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planning
Plan your essay with a clear start, middle and end. State your view in the intro and keep it in the body with 2 or 3 clear points.
linguistic
Use linking words to join ideas. Show order and how each idea relates to the last.
grammar
Use simple and common words. Check for big grammar and spelling issues.
content
Stick to one side and give a clear example for each point to show you can reason.
content
The writer shows a view and keeps to the topic.
relevance
There is some idea about environment and traffic.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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