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Some people believe bicycles have a lot of advantages whereas others believe bicycles have more disadvantages. Discuss both and give your opinion.

Bicycles
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 are a great way to improve your
health
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. The question is, there are many people who believe
bicycles
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 have more advantages than disadvantages. In my opinion, I believe
bicycles
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 benefits are greater. In
this
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 essay, I am going to discuss both views and give my opinion. First of all,
bicycles
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 have so many benefits
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 I am going to introduce some of them. First benefit,
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 is environmentally friendly transportation, because there is no pollution.
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, it is a great exercise to improve human
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especially
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, especially
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elderly
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 people.
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,
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 gives real experience when you are cycling in a forest or natural place.
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, I have been cycling since I was a child
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, my
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 and my mental
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 are great because I go to the forest for cycling every week.
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, there are too many disadvantages. First drawback, there are a lot of cars nowadays
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, cycling is getting dangerous to cycle near the cars.
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, there are some countries that do not have prepared bike lanes for cycling.
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, Safety clothes are getting more expensive, so not everyone can buy them.
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, in Oman, there are no prepared bike
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, so they are
cylcing
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cycling
 in the same lane with cars
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as a result
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, they have 1000 accidents every year. In
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conclusion, I would argue that cycling is a great sport,
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bicycles
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 have too many drawbacks, their benefits are still greater
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 they are healthy, environmentally friendly, and
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 useful for daily transportation.

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planning
Plan before writing. Make a short plan with the main ideas: good points, bad points, and your view. Then write a warm intro, two body parts, and a short ending.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas, such as 'first', 'also', 'but', and 'in addition'.
grammar
Keep sentences simple and easy to read. Check capital letters, verb form, and small mistakes.
examples
Give clear examples from life. Talk about daily use of bikes and its health or money saving effects.
idea
The opinion is clear and there is a choice.
structure
There is an intro, body, and conclusion.
examples
Some points have examples to back them up.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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