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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates key information about the
production
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milk
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 annually in four countries in 1990,2000, and 2010.
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, it can be clearly seen from the table that the highest
production
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milk
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 annually was in
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Netherlands
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 in all years,
whereas
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 the lowest
production
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 of
milk
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 annually was in
Guatemala
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. Looking at the details, we can notice that in 1990, the highest
production
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 of
milk
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 annually was in
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, and the second highest was in Australia,
then
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 in
Tanzani
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Tanzania
,
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 the lowest
production
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 of
milk
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 annually was in
Guatemala
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 at 11262000, 11246000, 87000, 26000, respectively. In terms of 2000, the
production
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milk
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 annually in
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and Australia
were
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was
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 slightly
a decline
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declining
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 at 11155000, 11105000, respectively, whilst in
Tanzani
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Tanzania
 and
Guatemala
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were
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 sharply a boom at 142000, 55000, respectively. In terms of 2010, in Australia, the
production
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milk
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 annually reduced
approximately
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 2000000,
while
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in others
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others country
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other countries
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 increased around 3000 in
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and
Guatemala
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, milk, netherlands, guatemala with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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