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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010.

The table chart illustrates how much milk is produced in four different parts of the world in the years 1999, 2000, and 2010.
Overall
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, we can see that the Netherlands had the highest
amount
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 of milk
made
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produced
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 in all of the periods given,
while
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Guatemala
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 had the lowest
amount
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 of
produced milk
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milk produced
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.
According to
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 the data shown, in the year 1999, the people of the Netherlands consumed an elevated number; the
amount
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 of the liquid generated decreased by 16 for Australia and even more for Tanzania, reaching 87000; and as for the country with the least
amount
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, it is
Guatemala
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, with 26000.Australians in 2000 and 2010 made 110500 and 9165000, respectively. As for Tanzania and
Guatemala
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, both had a number near 10000 in 2010, and in
2000
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2000,
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 Tanzanian manufacturers made around 150000;
on the other hand
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, dairy companies and factories in
Guatemala
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 made a number that was under 700000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, guatemala with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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