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Band 2.5

Do pepople rely to much on online shopping nowadays

Pepople
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People
 have a different view about but
same
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the same
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 kind of product bu
online
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an online
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 store .In my
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opinion
openion
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this
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wat
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way
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have
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has
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 a
benifit
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benefit
 for all
pepople becouse
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people because
 the courier
delevred
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delivered
 very fast and a battery than others On
one the
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the one
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 hand.Today
many
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, many
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people
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 rely too much on online shopping.
when
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When
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 you busy
day
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day,
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 you should
inter
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wear
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special
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a special
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 app program have modern clothes
anda
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and
 shoes.You only chose
and but
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apply
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it same items .
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example
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example,
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 take
the
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apply
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Istanbul
where
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, where
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loceted
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located
 in
a
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apply
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Turkey.The Istanbul
people
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 save
the
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apply
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time
anda
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and
 use one method .The method about
same
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the same
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people
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syat
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stay
tahrir
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at
jome
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home
 and order new
thing
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things
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 from
the
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apply
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online shopping. On the
ather
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other
 hand
may be
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,
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same
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some
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 older
people
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thing
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think
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 that everyone should go to the shopping
mal
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mall
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 or supermarket when they need.
Becouse
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Because
this
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wat
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was
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 very
usefull
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useful
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, especialy
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especialy
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especially
older
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for older
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people
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.If you book
samething
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something
 online store you will
becone
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become
 poor
becouse
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because
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this
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these
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 online shopping things
very
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are very
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 expensive .
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example
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example,
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 you order
Laptop
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a Laptop
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 which is iconic around the world
but
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, but
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 the courier
delevred
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delivered
 it
a
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to a
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neighbor
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neighbour
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 who went
to
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apply
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on a holiday
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, anda
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anda
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and
this
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product
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product's
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 condition
very
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is very
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owfull
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awful
 and itesm
demeged
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damaged
So
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. So
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 I
perefer
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prefer
go
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to go
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 to the market . To sum
yo
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up yo
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 it seems to me
the
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that
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go
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going
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 to the shopping
mal
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mall
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 is
a
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apply
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battery than online
store
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shopping
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In
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. In
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personalky
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person, I
beleive
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believe
 the supermarket
cheaper
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is cheaper
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 and
safe
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safer
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.

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planning
Make a clear plan for your essay. Write an intro that states your view, 2 body parts that give reasons and examples, and a short ending.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. Use simple, common words and check common errors like 'their' vs 'there' and 'and' vs 'an'.
cohesion
Use link words to connect ideas. Use words like first, next, also, but, so, finally.
examples
Give a clear example with a little detail and relate it to your point.
organization
Avoid repeating the same idea. Keep one topic in each part and finish with a small end statement.
content
The essay shows a view on online shopping and on the store
content
You use examples like the city of Istanbul.
tone
You state your own idea in the end.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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