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people now have freedom to live and work anywhere in the world due to the development in the communication and transportation. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

The new technological advancements
has
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have
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 made it easier for
people
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 to find jobs and settle
aboard
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abroad
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. The main advantages are being valued for having
skills
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 and higher earnings chances .
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, drawbacks can be loneliness and discrimination. The main advantages of settling in foreign
countries
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 include
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to earn higher
wages
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 and
skills
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 considered valuable .
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people
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 move out of their home country because the
skills
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 they have
get
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are not
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 lower
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wages
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as highly
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 in their home country as compared to other foreign
countries
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.
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, in India, carpenters and construction workers earn minimum
wages
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 despite their
hardwork
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hard work
 and long
work
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 hours.
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this
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 reason, skilled workers look for similar jobs abroad that have
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the
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potential
of generating
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to generate
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 higher income for them .
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,by comparing their
wages
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 with other
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countries
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countries,
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 they make their decision to move out of their comfort zone.
In addition
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 ,
such
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skills
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 are
high in
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in high
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 demand
and
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, and
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countries
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 like Canada and Australia need these
people
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 to build homes .
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, these
countries
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 in return
offer
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visa
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a visa
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 or permanent residency and
job
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a job
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offer
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 with
high paying
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high-paying
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 employment. Building a new life
aboard
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abroad
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 is not easy and comes with many drawbacks
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such
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, such
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 as
feeling
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feelings
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 of loneliness and discrimination. New settlers leave behind family and friends, after coming home from
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work
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work,
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 they feel alone and see themselves eating alone with no family around .
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 is especially difficult for those who have lived their entire life
with
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in
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joint
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a joint
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 family.
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, they often face discrimination at
work
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such
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, such
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 as colleagues
ignoring
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failing
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 to
offer
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 help at
work
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 and putting
excess
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an excessive
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 workload.
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 challenges result in depression and homesickness and may
also
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 lead to suicide. In conclusion, skilled workers receive higher
salary
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salaries
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 and
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offer
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are offered
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 to settle
permanently
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permanent
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 by foreign
countries
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,
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.
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However
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, the drawbacks are
they
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that they
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 feel alone and
sometime
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sometimes
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treated
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are treated
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 differently by native
people
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.

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structure
Plan a short intro that states your view and what you will cover.
coherence
Use one idea per paragraph and link them with simple words like and, but, also, so.
content
Provide clear examples for each point and explain how they show a point.
grammar
Fix grammar errors like has vs have, abroad, and run-on sentences. Use punctuation to end sentences.
vocabulary
Keep words simple and show a light form of work here, not a long list of fancy words.
content
Good choice of topic and clear view on both sides.
examples
Uses an example to show demand for skills in Canada and Australia.
Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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