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You are having problems with a neighbour’s animals because the fence between your properties is old and In poor repair. You want the neighbour to pay half the cost of building a new fence. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: say what the problems are explain how a new fence will solve the problems suggest that the neighbour pays half of the cost​ You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ....................., You should write a minimum of 150 words.

Task answer Dear Sara, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 to discuss an ongoing issue with your animals entering my property
due to
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 the bad condition of
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fence
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the fence
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in
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apply
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between our properties. For the past couple of weeks, you can observe that our
fence
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 is old
an
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and
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 in poor repair. Recently, your animals have started to cross or lean over that boundary line and were damaging my garden.
Moreover
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, sometimes
because
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, because
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 of
this
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situation
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 I was not able to use my outdoor space peacefully. I believe replacing the old
fence
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 with a new and sturdy one will be an effective solution for all these problems. Having a new
fence
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 will not only provide protection for my outdoor plants, but
also
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 keep your animals in more
safe
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safer
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 and secure environment. Since the new
fence
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 separates both of our properties and
equally
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is equally
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 beneficial, I would like to suggest that we share the cost
for
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of
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 building it. I have already made an initial estimate and would be happy to discuss it with you
and
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, and
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 can make modifications if required. Thank you for your understanding and cooperation. I hope
this
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 issue can be resolved smoothly. Best regards, James

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task response
Task response: You cover the main parts. You ask for half the cost. You could add a clear ask for action and a short plan for how to split costs.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The flow is ok. Some lines are long. Use shorter sentences and a clear link word to join ideas.
task response
Told the problem well and gave a plan to fix it.
coherence and cohesion
Polite tone and good closing.
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