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The chart below shows the number of houses sold in 8 cities in the world for more than 5 Million US dollars in 2009 and 2014.

The bar chart compares the
number
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 of
houses
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 sold for more than 5 million US dollars in eight
cities
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 worldwide in 2009 and 2014.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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London
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 sold the highest
number
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 of
houses
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 compared to other
cities
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 in both years.
In contrast
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, Dubai recorded the lowest figures,
while
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 New York had the second-highest
sales
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. In 2009, the
number
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 of
houses
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 sold in
London
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 was slightly higher than that of New York, at around 523 and 476 , respectively. Surprisingly,
London
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 recorded a dramatic increase, reaching approximately 1,638
houses
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 in 2014, and remained the dominant city in terms of high-value house
sales
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 among the given
cities
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.
Moreover
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, New York
also
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 saw a steady increase, reaching 796 house
sales
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 by 2014,
although
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this
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 figure remained well below that of
London
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. Regarding other
cities
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, Dubai recorded the lowest figures, starting at 12 house
sales
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 and rising to 46 by the end of the period.
However
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, the
number
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 of
houses
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 sold in Singapore experienced a slight decline , falling from 107 to 47 over the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, houses, cities, london, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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