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Writing Samples
Band 4

You want to sell some of your funiture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter > explain why you are selling > describe the furniture > suggest a date when your friend can come and see the furniture

Dear Fajar, I hope you are feeling well
,
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.
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 I
write
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am writing
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this
Linking Words
 letter
for
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to
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 inform you that I want to sell my furniture My family has
planning
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plans
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for moving
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to move
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into
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to
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other
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another
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 city next month. I want to let you know that I have some
furnitures
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furniture
 in my room and
i
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I
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 have to sell it,
such
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 as
table
Correct article usage
a table
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,
sofa
Correct article usage
a sofa
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, and
desk
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a desk
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. For
this
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 chance, I want to offer all of them
with
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at
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friendly
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a friendly
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 price. The table is very good for
using
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use
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 in a room because it
has
Verb problem
is of
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small
Correct article usage
a small
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 size. The sofa is
also
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 comfortable with a pillow
and
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, and
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 the desk as well. If you are
interesting
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interested
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for
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in
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 all of my
furnitures
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furniture
. You can come into my house on 5-6 Apr at these
wekends
Correct your spelling
weekends
 to have a look. I hope you reply
Linking Words
this
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to this
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 letter soon
, thank
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. Thank
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 you muhammad

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task response
The idea is clear, but fix grammar. Use 'to inform you' instead of 'for inform you' and 'furniture' for all items. Add 'we are moving' instead of 'my family has planning'.
coherence and cohesion
Make each idea its own paragraph. Start with the reason to sell, then describe the items, then the date to visit. Use simple links like 'and', 'also', 'then' to join ideas.
style
Opening is polite with 'Dear Fajar'.
content
You name all three parts: reason to sell, what you have, and the date to visit.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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