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The bar chart below shows the number of tourists in three nations who travel to Australia in 2005 and 2015. The graph below shows the number of tourists who use two types for holiday. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar graph and line graph depict the total
of
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number of
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tourists
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 who visit
to
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apply
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Australia from the United States, the United Kingdom and Japan, and their holiday types between 2005 and 2015.
Overall
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, the sum of visitors from the given countries
elevated
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increased
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 during the
time
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 span, except
from
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for
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 Japan.
Although
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 the
tourists
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 who
prefferred
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preferred
 backpacking increased steadily over
the
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apply
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time
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time,
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while
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 there were fluctuations reported for the total
of
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number of
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tourists
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 who stayed at resorts. In 2005, the highest figure of
tourists
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 was recorded by Japan, accounting for over 1,400,000, which was similar to
sum
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the sum
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 of
tourists
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 from the UK and USA in the next decade. The lowest figure was reported by the United
Stated
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States
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 in the initial year, accounting for nearly 500,000. In terms of the holiday types, there is a gradual upward trend
for
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in
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 the preference for backpacking throughout the
time
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 span.
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, visitors who preferred to stay in hotels varied during the
time
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 frame, reported
a
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an
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 upward trend in
first
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the first
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 five years and declined during the next five-year period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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