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Some people think it is better for children to grow up in the city, while others think that life in the coutrysidecis more suitable. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?

The world today has changed, and that includes how
people
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 think about living in the
city
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 or the
countryside
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. Some
people
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 think that it is better for kids to live in a
city
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,
while
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 others think that living in the
countryside
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 is approved.
This
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 essay will examine the
advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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 of both
places
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. On the one hand, there are many
advantages
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 of living in the
city
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.
First,
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in the
city
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, there is public service.
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, there are hospitals which are important for
people
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.
Also
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, there are many entertainment
places
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.
Second,
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there is better
education
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.Every five years study method has changed.
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, the government always try to improve
education
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.
However
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, there are plenty of
disadvantages
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 to living in the
city
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. Many
people
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 do not want to live in the
city
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 because of pollution.
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,
people
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 who live in the
city
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 do not care about their
environment
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.
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, the public does not use paper straws
instead
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 of plastic straws,and does not care to do simple things to save their
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.
Therefore
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, there is a lot of noise there.
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, somebody faces a struggle to study or work because of noise.
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,
on the other hand
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, there are several
advantages
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 of living in the
countryside
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. The first reason is fresh air. The public can breathe fresh air and enjoy doing their job. Another reason is that there is good
environment
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. Many
people
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 who live there take care of their
environment
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, and they do not do anything that could cause harm to it. Regardless of the
advantages
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, there are a lot of
disadvantages
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 to living in the
countryside
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.
For instance
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, their
education
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 method is so poor.
Moreover
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, they do not Has anybody improved their
education
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 method
,
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, they have a lack of hospitals. If an emergency happens, they will have the responsibility because there are no doctors there. In conclusion, both
places
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 have
advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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, and everyone has a different opinion about
this
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 topic. In my opinion, I think living in the
city
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 is better for many reasons,
such
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 as there is better
education
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 and there are a lot of entertainment
places
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 and public services.

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structure
Plan by idea. In each paragraph put one main idea, a reason, and an example.
content
Explain each point with a real reason and simple example.
grammar
Check your grammar.Use the right verb form and make plural nouns with s.
coherence
Use clear links. Start with firstly, next, then, finally, also and but to move ideas.
conclusion
Finish with a short clear view in the end.
purpose
There is a try to talk about both sides of city and country life.
structure
There is a clear end that says what the writer thinks.
coherence
Some linking words are used to connect ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • city
  • countryside
  • children
  • education
  • nature
  • outdoor
  • activities
  • shops
  • services
  • cultural
  • experiences
  • stress
  • friendships
  • community
  • isolation
  • opportunities
  • library
  • school
  • family
  • games
  • lifestyle
  • environment
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