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Band 4.5

People say that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As the world becomes more
globalized
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 and interconnected, it is vital for
students
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 and young people to travel abroad to experience diverse cultures and customs. Through allowing
students
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 to learn from foreign inhabitants, a
country
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 could open its doors to migrants and expand its workforce whilst promoting an international world view.
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,
students
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 could absorb shared knowledge from the locals abroad and look into applying
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 to mitigate issues found in their home
country
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, namely, homelessness, poverty and a lack of accessible transportation. Learning through others has been proven to be a powerful tool in enhancing knowledge and
competancies
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competencies
, as some countries have implemented adjustments to their school curriculum, adhering to international standards.
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 promoted the emphasis on student mental health and well-being.
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, as these
students
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 represent their
country
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 of origin, talented and
hard working
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students
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 could be
recognized
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 for certain contributions they make whilst in the overseas programme.
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 could become a noticeable
boone
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boon
 to the economic and
politcal
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political
 ties between the two countries.
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, critics argue that
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 study programmes risk having
students
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 move abroad as they may seek to migrate rather than help alleviate the problems of their home
country
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. On top of
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, as the younger generation absorbs foreign cultures, the long-standing traditions and customs of the
country
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 could be threatened by gentrification and
modernization
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. Languages
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 risk becoming endangered via a widening generational gap.
Although
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 overseas study programmes can be greatly beneficial in promoting diversity, enhancing knowledge, and bolstering ties between nations, it is vital to protect the traditions, language and culture of these countries.

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structure
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evidence
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language
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coherence
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balance
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conclusion
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ideas
Some ideas on how studying abroad could help are shown.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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