IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 2.5

“Some people say that all popular TV entertainment programmes should aim to educate viewers about important social issues.” To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Entertainment
programmes
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TV
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on TV
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 have
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an enermous
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enermous
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enormous
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people
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. Some
people
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 believe that TV
programmes
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 are for
funy
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fun
 only
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while
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, while
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 others argue that these shows should
have
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apply
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educate viewers.
This
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 essay explains that
should we
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we should
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 have
variuos
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various
of
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apply
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programmes
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 that engage
eduction
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education
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 in entertainment shows for teenagers and adults as
will
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well
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. One crucial way that
influenced
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 teenagers is entertainment
programmes
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.
This
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 means that, ascolidance
spend
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spends
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 a lot of
time
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 toward
televitions
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television
.
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, some
people
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prefered
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prefer
show
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to watch
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 TV during
weekend
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the weekend
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and
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, and
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this
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 behaviour will be negative if they only show
imoral
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immoral
 or meaningless
contents
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content
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.
As a result
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,
people
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 who do not care about what he
say
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says
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they
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apply
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will
discovered
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discover
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 that they waste their golden
time
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 over
time
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.
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, parents have
consern
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concerns
 about their
children
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children's
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 behaviour;
for
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this
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 reason, they will protect them from malevolent and circuitous contents.
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, almost
popluar
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popular
vamous
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people
 have a
sycology
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psychological
 illness, so they tend to show
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apply
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a
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apply
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bad behaviour.
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, over
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time
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time,
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 there are will be
infuencled
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influenced
from
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by
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 them. In
constract
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contrast
, there are several programs that contribute
on
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to
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 healthy and useful ideas. In
conclude
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,
teenagres
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teenagers
 have to be protected from bad ideas by their parents.
some
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Some
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programmes
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 have a wide
of
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range of
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 positive content.

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planning
Plan your work. Say your view in the first part and end with a short ending.
coherence
Use a clear idea in each paragraph. Link ideas with simple join words like 'and', 'but', 'so'.
grammar
Fix small errors in spelling and grammar. They hide the point.
examples
Give one clear example for your point. Keep examples short and easy to follow.
idea
The writer tries to argue about TV can teach
content
There is a focus on both teens and parents
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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