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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar
chart
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 below depicts the percentage rate of apartments of both owned and rented houses
betweeen
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between
 two countries, England and Wales
from
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, from
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 1918 to 2011.
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, it is evident that the highest
values
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value
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of
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apply
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between both
house holds
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households
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 was at 80%
that
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which
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 falls under the rented
accomodation
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accommodation
 which was in the first
year
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 and
then
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 they dropped drastically throughout the years.
Firstly
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, the houses of owned
accomodations
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accommodations
flows
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flow
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 in an ascending order through the
chart
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.
they
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They
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 began at slightly above 20% in the first
year
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 to
develop
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 gradually through the years. More so, they reached a peak in the
year
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 1991
which
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, which
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 accounted for about 69% before a decrease to roughly 65% in the final
year
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.
In contrast
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 to the first apartments, the rented
accomodations
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accommodations
follows
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follow
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 a different pattern as they descend through the bar
chart
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. Progressively, they kicked off at 80% in 1918, and they began to decrease through the years.
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,
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apply
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 there was a halt in the reduction between the
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year
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years
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 1991 and 2001, the
chart
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 had a rebound in the final
year
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 that accounted for 35%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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