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Band 4.5

You had borrowed money from your friend when you were facing some financial problems and forgot to pay it back. Write a letter to your friend and in your letter: ● apologize for being late in returning the money ● explain what happened ● say how you are going to fix the issue now

Dear Chanuka, I hope
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 doing well.
I'm
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 really appreciate your help. I know that you have helped me when I was in
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trouble
and
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 without your
money there was
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help, I would not have been able
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no
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to
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 overcome
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it. I'm thankful for your support and
apologizing
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 for the late
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payback
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.
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,
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I
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 had to go back
my
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to my
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 country
in
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at
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 that time
due to
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managment
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management
 issues in my company. I needed to be there to check some reports and many other
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. I'm currently in my home country and busy with my
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. Additionally
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additionally
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, my company
still
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is still
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 not in a profitable situation
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, so
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i
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I
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 have to stay here
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a little
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 longer.
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, my plan is
settle
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to settle
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 down your money
this
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 week since one of my managers
move
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 to
Austraila
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Australia
 next week and I had a chat with
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next,
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everything
have
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organized
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 by now.
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, my manager will have a home visit
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within
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next
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the next
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 couple of days
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 he will explain everything. Thank
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 for your help. Your mate, Lakshan

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structure
Plan your note with clear parts: a short apology, a brief reason, and a clear plan to pay back. Use one idea per paragraph.
grammar
Use simple past and simple forms. Check words like 'am', 'were', 'will' and tiny spell mistakes.
tone
Keep a calm and polite tone. Do not read like you are in a big hurry.
tone
Polite in tone and thanks for help.
content
Gives a plan to pay back money.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial hardship
  • unintended oversight
  • profoundly regretful
  • amicable resolution
  • irreplaceable support
  • repayment schedule
  • heartfelt gratitude
  • unwavering patience
  • promptly address
  • sincerely apologize
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