The table below shows the percentage of working men and women in different areas of employement in one country in 1986, 1996 and 2006

The graph compares how many male and female workers were employed in 4 main areas : catering , banking ,manufacturing and education , within 3 decades (1986, 1996, 2006).
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, it can be seen that, percentage of
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genders employed in manufacturing decreased during the decades,
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other sectors increased.
To begin
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with, Manufacturing was the only area where employment declined for
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genders
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men from 32% to 17 and women from 18 to 6 over 20 20-year period. Between 1986 and 2006, the percentage of men employed in catering increased moderately
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the proportions of women in
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sector remained stable. Banking shows big changes over the years for
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males and females. In 1986,
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employed in banking peaked at 21% and 19% respectively. When it comes to education, the man worked in education rose steadily by about 1% every ten years , and women
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high employment percentages of about 38% in 2006.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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