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People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why this problem occurs? What are the best ways to reduce this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, many
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 who travel to another country feel lonely and homesick, especially during the early stages of their stay.
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 essay outlines the main causes of these feelings and suggests practical solutions individuals can take to deal with
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 problem. One major cause of homesickness is missing family. Being far from parents and siblings often means losing daily emotional support, home-cooked meals, and shared routines.
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 absence can make
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 feel emotionally disconnected and unsupported. Another reason is travelling alone. When
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 move without friends, they may struggle to form new social connections, which leads to isolation and boredom.
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, unfamiliar surroundings play a key role. Differences in culture, customs, food, climate, and language can make
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 feel uncomfortable and insecure, especially if they are not confident communicating with others.
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, they may avoid social interaction and feel like outsiders in the new country. There are several effective ways individuals can reduce these feelings. One useful solution is maintaining regular contact with family through phone or video calls.
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 helps
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 feel emotionally supported and reminds them that they are not alone. Another method is decorating the living space with family photos or familiar objects, which creates a sense of comfort and belonging. Cooking traditional food can
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 help
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 stay connected to their culture and memories of home.
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, joining volunteer programs, clubs, or group activities allows
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 to meet others and build friendships. Exploring local areas and tourist attractions is
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 helpful, as it helps individuals understand the culture
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 keeping themselves active and engaged. In conclusion,
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 travelling abroad for work or study can cause homesickness and loneliness, practical steps
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 as staying connected with family, socialising, and engaging with the local environment can help
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 adjust and feel more settled.

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task response
To raise task response, make a clear main idea at the start and answer both parts: why homesickness happens and how to cut it.
coherence
Use more clear links to join ideas, like 'First', 'Then', 'Finally' to show steps and why.
content
Add a real small example from life to show a point better.
lexical
Use plain words rather than hard or new ones. Keep wording simple.
structure
Keep each paragraph about one main idea and finish with a short ending.
structure
Clear layout with intro, body, and conclusion.
coherence
Good use of linking words like 'Another reason', 'In addition', 'As a result'.
content
The answer covers both causes and ways to help.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homesick
  • homesickness
  • country
  • move
  • live
  • work
  • study
  • feel
  • sad
  • miss
  • family
  • friends
  • language
  • culture
  • home
  • adapt
  • adjust
  • routine
  • plan
  • help
  • support
  • group
  • club
  • friend
  • talk
  • listen
  • learn
  • speak
  • local
  • new
  • different
  • easy
  • difficult
  • visit
  • cook
  • food
  • city
  • campus
  • worry
  • stress
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