The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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the outcomes of
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a survey
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about
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the proporation
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proporation
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proportion
of people's
coffee
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and tea purchasing and drinking habits in 5 regions in Australia
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over
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last
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the last
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four weeks.
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that the percentage of city residents who bought Fresh
Coffee
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or tea was an upward trend in all
cities
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,
while
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the rate who
preffered
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preferred
to buy fresh
coffee
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has the same
precentage
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percentage
in two
cities
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which
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, which
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are Brisbane and Adelaide.
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with, the highest figure for people who went to
cafe
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a cafe
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for
coffee
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or tea in three locations in Australia, which are SydneyMelbourne, and Hobart, where the rate
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is just
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under 65%. Meanwhile, the
proporation
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proportion
witnessed a decrease in
other
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the other
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two
cities
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which
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, which
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are Brisbane and Adelaide (56%, 49%, respectively).
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, regarding to
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both regions which are Brisbane and
Adelaide
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Adelaide,
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have approximately the same rate, standing at 34% in buying fresh
coffee
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.
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, buying instant
coffee
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illustrated
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precentage
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percentage
in all five
cities
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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