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An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * Offer to find somewhere to stay * Give advice about what to do * Give information about what clothes to bring

Dear Sam, I hope
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 doing well. I
recived
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received
 your letter asking about information about my country
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i'm
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 happy to help.
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, I'm quite happy for selected to visit my country
in
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 your holiday. I told you about many things about my country
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such
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 as tourist attractions and breathtaking beaches
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 many more. I have small plan about places that you shoud visit during the period of staying which there is a wonderful rain forest near my home town and you can visit that jungle first
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 you can stay my home during first couple of days next there is hotel near Matara beach side and it is running by one of my friends so I alredy booked there and you can stay
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 enjoing the wonderful beach.
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, you
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don't
 need to take heavy
cloths
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 with you since it is kind of hot here,
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i
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I
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 suggest you
to
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bring a large hat and sun
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cream
 which will
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your
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 to
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protect
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so
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thats
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 all for now, see you soon
buddy
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.
your
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 friend, Lakshan.

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task response
Be clear on the plan. Say what place you will stay, name a few things to do, and how the person will get the info.
coherence and cohesion
Make each idea in its own paragraph. Start with a plan, then talk about places to do, then talk about clothes.
tone
Warm and friendly tone.
content
Gives stay help and place to visit.
content
Gives clothes advice.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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