The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed in 1970 and2005 in England and Wales.

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involving three types of crime—car theft, house burglary, and street robbery—in England and Wales between 1970 and 2005.
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while
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the figure for all three crimes increased throughout the period, car theft recorded the largest figures for most years.
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, street robbery
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the least frequent crime,
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it showed a steady rise
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in the end. Regarding car theft,
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began at approximately 0.4
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in 1970 and rose sharply to reach a peak of 1.6
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in 1995.
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saw a substantial decline, ending the period at 1
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in 2005. . In terms of the other two crimes, house
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stood at 0.2
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in 1970 and showed a fluctuating upward trend, hitting a high point of about 0.85
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in 1980 before gradually falling to 0.5
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by 2005. Street robbery had the fewest recorded
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remained steady until 1990 at around 0.1
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, it experienced a gradual increase, reaching 0.4
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cases
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by the end of the period.

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