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Some people think that living in big cities offers more advantages than disadvantages, while others believe that life in small towns and villages is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There has been considerable debate about
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 of quality of
life
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, comparing
life
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 in big
cities
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 and small
cities
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 or villages, which has divided public opinion into two main views. One group of people believes that
life
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 in big
cities
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 has numerous advantages,
whereas
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 the other group claims that
life
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 in small places offers significant benefits.
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 essay will discuss and examine both views
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 before presenting my personal opinion.
According to
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 the first group of supporters,
quality
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the quality
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 of urban
life
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 mostly outweighs compared
with
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of
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 a rural lifestyle, because of its advantages. As a main and most prominent
reason
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reason,
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 they mention the accessibility to efficient healthcare, educational institutions and cultural events.
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, they say that by living in a city, individuals potentially are developing their social and intellectual awareness, and are constantly in touch with global cultural trends. As examples of these facts, we can mention the possibility of fast reaction of medical help in emergency situations.
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, those who disagree
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 argue that living in rural areas is
incomparable
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 advantageous. They claim, the major benefit of
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 a lifestyle is that people could potentially live
stressless
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stress-free
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 in harmony, avoiding the city's congestion and noise.
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, locals live
healthier
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a healthier
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life
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as a result
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 of good air quality.
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, rural people are often
recognizable
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 for their calmness and the smile on their faces. In my opinion,
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 living in small places brings several drawbacks, I think that a rural lifestyle outweighs living in enormous
cities
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 regarding benefits and disadvantages. In conclusion, both perspectives presented valid arguments. Perhaps ultimately,
this
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represent
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represents
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 individual choice.

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overall
Plan your essay well. Use four parts: intro, one para for pro and one for con, and a short ending with your view.
coherence
Link ideas clearly. Use simple words like first, also, but, for example, therefore to show how ideas join.
coherence
Give simple and real examples. Mention easy facts like access to health care and schools in a city, and quiet air or calm life in the country.
grammar
Check grammar. Watch for noun and verb forms and article use.
task
End with a clear line. Restate your view and give a short final thought.
structure
The essay has a clear plan: intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
content
It shows both views and the writer’s own view.
coherence
There are ideas to show how life in city and in country differ.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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