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Band 5.5

You have moved to another city but your bank has your old address and continues to send all communication there. Write a letter to your bank branch. In the letter, mention: •Where have you moved? •What problem are you facing regarding the bank’s communication? •What you want them to do regarding old communication already sent to the wrong address.

Dear Manager, I hope
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 finds you well.
This
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 is Jeevitha Sachithanantham, from Calgary. I am writing to notify you to update my new
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 in the bank records for future communications. I was
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residing at 67
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, Calgary
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, I recently moved to a new apartment at 57
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parks street
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, Ontario-T23 G5T from the 1st of January, 2026.
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 change, I missed the communication regarding my loan renewal, as it was delivered to my old
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, I am unable to renew the policy,
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the loan was not paid on the given due date.
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, it has caused a significant inconvenience to me. I would request you to collect the letter, which was sent incorrectly to my old
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 the bank records to avoid
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 inconvenience in the future. I look forward to hearing your response at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely, Jeevitha S

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grammar
Fix small grammar errors. Use 'this email' and 'I live at' instead of 'I was a residing at'.
clarity
Be clear on what you want the bank to do about old letters.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with your move, then the problem, then what you want.
tone
Keep a calm, polite tone and use short sentences.
format
Add a subject line and your full name to make it clear who and what the mail is about.
content
Give clear dates and the new address in a simple way.
content
The move and new address are shown.
tone
The tone stays polite and formal.
action
The letter asks to take back the old letter.
coherence
The move and mail issue link well.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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