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Too much empasis placed on testing these days. The need to prepare for tests and examination is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

In recent years, with the rising demand
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, there has been more emphasis on exams and
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. In fact, the over-emphasis on
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 has led to unnecessary pressure on both
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 and
students
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 alike.
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 it is true that testings place significant importance
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students'
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 academic growth,
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, it is undeniable that if
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 brings pressure to them,
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 will only impede the growth of learners. As
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, I fully agree with the statement with the reasons provided below. First of all, society believes that
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 in exams and
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 prove the worth of
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. Because of
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 situation, many young learners learn not for the sake of expanding their horizon, but for getting
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higher scores in
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. They blindly
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 the words
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 their books without fully understanding them and absorbing the knowledge behind, resulting in them spending thousands of
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 preparing for an excessive
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 of information that they are not willing to learn.
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, they may not only develop a distorted view
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 learning, but
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 be pressured
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 studying. As for
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, the change in the education system may lead to a different mode of teaching. With the focus being
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students
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 get higher grades,
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 will
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 have to teach in a completely new style. They may only teach by the book without ever explaining the reasons behind or giving examples
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 have a more efficient way of providing information to
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.
Teachers
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 may only be a tool for learning for
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instead
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 of a companion in their journey of getting more knowledge. In my opinion,
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 examinations and
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 are definitely a surefire way for
students
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 to check their understanding of what they learn,
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putting too much attention
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 them will only turn
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 away from learning.
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, there should be a balance between teaching and examinations
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 that
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 can learn more effectively.

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content development
Use clearer facts or tiny examples from school life to show your points.
language
Fix grammar and form. For example, use 'testing' not 'testings'.
structure
Add a clear start and end. State your view in the intro and sum up in the conclusion.
cohesion
Use better link word to join ideas. Show cause, effect and contrast.
content strength
You show clear view and talk about both learners and teachers.
structure strength
Your essay has a good flow from problem to solution.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • high-stakes testing
  • standardized tests
  • curriculum
  • teacher autonomy
  • psychological effects
  • student well-being
  • assessment methods
  • project-based learning
  • continuous assessment
  • holistic learning
  • educational pressure
  • creativity in teaching
  • motivation to learn
  • restrictive practices
  • education systems
  • academic performance
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