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Band 4

some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same openion as them. Other people believe its good to have friends who some time disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own openion.

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 argue that it is better to be friends with those who share the same ideas, others believe that having friends who occasionally disagree is more beneficial.
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discusses
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both
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 of the
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statement
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 with my own
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opinion
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 a good
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benift
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benefit
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 it always helps
peopel
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people
 to share their ideas with them. But choosing
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friend
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some time
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luck to
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 a good
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 throughout the whole
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differnt
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different
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beliefs
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 and ideas
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find
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finding
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 a
friend
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 with the same mindset is
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more
benifitial
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beneficial
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different
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exsample
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example
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 who has more
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focus
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benefit more
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 than other
peoepl
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people
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Because
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idea
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 about future education and it will
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influence
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them to
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 build up together.
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becoming
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freind
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friend
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someone who
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a differnt
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more
usefull
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useful
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Because
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take
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make
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decission
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decisions
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their
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life
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different
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their
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ide
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idea
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 when
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have
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, peoepls
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peoepls
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people
 used to do some
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activities that
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themselves
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 or
socialty
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society
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situations
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it
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can be
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prevented
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from
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the
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a
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frend
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friend
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a differnt
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differnt
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different
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conclusion
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having
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frind
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friend
in
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with
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a differnt
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differnt
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different
idea
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 or
same
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the same
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idea
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 has
equial benifts
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equal benefits
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As
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opinion
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opinion,
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i
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I
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belive
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believe
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apply
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both types of
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friend
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friends
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 in our
life
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planning
Work on a clear plan before writing. Make a short outline with two sides and your view at the end.
grammar
Keep grammar simple and correct. Watch spelling and punctuation to help your meaning.
cohesion
Use ideas in a logical order. Start with a topic sentence for each paragraph and link your ideas with simple words like first, then, but, also.
content
Give one or two clear examples that support your point. Explain why it matters.
task response
You try to discuss both sides and state an opinion.
coherence
You end with a clear view that shows your stance.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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