The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The bar chart illustrated the annual income of American
households
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within three different
years
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2007
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: 2007
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, 2011 and 2015.
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,
family
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families
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who had $100000
and
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or
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over took up the highest figure,
while
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the other
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data showed
the upward trend of American
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households
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households'
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profit
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profits
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each
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years
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year
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, except for
family
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families
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who
have
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had
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salary
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a salary
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between $50000 and $74999 remained
unchange
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unchanged
. From 2007 to 2015,
household
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households
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family who have less than $25000 to $49999 demonstrated the same growth. In 2007, the profit of
households
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between $25000
to
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apply
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$49999 at around 25 to nearly 30
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millions
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million
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. The figure rose gradually to
approximtely
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approximately
30
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millions
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million
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before it dropped to about 25 to 27
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millions
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million
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in 2015. In terms of American
households
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income
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, income
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from $50000 to $99999 witnessed
the
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a
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substanable
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substantial
within
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increase within
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3
years
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,
while
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the family had income between $500000 and $74000 at over 20
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millions
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million
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and whose profit from $75000 to $99999 at around 15
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millions
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million
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. In
constract
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contrast
, the remarkable figure of US
households
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in 2007 stood at nearly 30
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millions
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and gradually
decline
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declined
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to about 27
miilions
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million
after 4
years
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then
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, then
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reached the peak at under 35
miilions
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million
at the end
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of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, years, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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