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The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

The diagram shows the process of how
bricks
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made
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are made
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 step by step for the building industry.
Overall
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, the process clearly shows seven steps of
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bricks
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brick
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 manufacture, commencing with
excavator
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an excavator
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 digging up some
clay
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 and
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the
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process is completed by subsequent delivery to the construction sector.
Initially
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,
digger
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the digger
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 digs up
clay
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, so
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clay
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the clay
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 can go through
metal
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the metal
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 grid and
rol
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roll
 from
roller
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the roller
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. After that, sand and water are combined with
clay
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, which is
then
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 passed through
wire
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a wire
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 cutter or mould to give
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clay
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the clay
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 a brick shape.
Subsequently
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,
bricks
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 go to the drying oven
and
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, and
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 the time it takes for them to dry is about 24 to 48 hours. Moving on to
next the
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the next
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stage, where in
kiln
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the kiln
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 the
bricks
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 will bake in high temperatures
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,
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approximately 870°C to 130°C.
As a result
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, in
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the
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cooling
chamber
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chamber,
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 it will stay around 3 days to cool them after baking. In the final stage, packaging the
bricks
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 to deliver them to building industries.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, clay with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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