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The graph illustrates that the number of visitors who visited a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph illustrates
that
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the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who visited a particular Caribbean
island
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 between 2010 and 2017.
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 was smaller than that of
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 during the period given
except
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, except
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the
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last
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 two years. The total trend of the
number
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 of
visitors
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 kept increasing during the period given. The total
number
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 of
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visitors
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beginned
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began
 growing from 1
millions
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million
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 and the total
number
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 kept increasing from 1
million
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 to 2.5
between
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million between
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 2010 and 2014. From 2014 to 2016, there was
a
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 obvious slowdown in the increase and only reached about 2.7
million
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. The total
number
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 jumped to 3.5
million
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 from 20016 to 2017. The
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 remained stable and kept
incresing
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increasing
 (1.5) until 2013. From 2013 to 2015, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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kept
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remained
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 stable
to
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at
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 1.5. At the same time, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 kept increasing to 1.3
until
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million until
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 2015. From 2015 to 2016, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 exceeded that of staying on
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island
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the island
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and
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, and
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finally
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 the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 reached 2
million
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, which
followed
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was followed
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 by that of staying on
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island
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the island
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 (1.5).

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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