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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Task2

In today’s
world
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knowing
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, knowing
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 more than two
languages
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became
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has become
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 very common. Before 20’s most
of
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people
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 weren’t able to speak a different
language
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 from their mother tongue.
However
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, with
a
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the
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 fast
involve
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involvement
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 of technology and
the
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social media that entered our lives changed the way of communication
as well as
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 the variety of
languages
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 that we use. The aim of learning foreign
languages
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were
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was
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more simple
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simpler
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 in 19’s. The main reasons were things like work
opportunuties
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opportunities
 and travelling plans.
In contrast
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, in today’s
world
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individuals
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, individuals
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 don’t have to learn a
language
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 so
detailed
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in-depth
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 to work or travel. To explain the reason, there are a lot of smartphone applications that
translates
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translate
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 and
perceives
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perceive
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 a text or a speech
to
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into
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 your mother tongue in seconds. Nowadays, everyone should know at least three
languages
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 to live as a citizen of the
world
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. It’s clear that
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people
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 who know two more
languages
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except
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besides
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 their mother tongue become successful at their
works
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work
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 or
on
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in
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 their social lives
easier
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more easily
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 than other
people
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. Even
,
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 in
Europe
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Europe,
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 it’s not possible to get a Bachelor’s
Degrees
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 for
people
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 from other nations without having
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enough knowledge of English or the
language
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 that the University
requests
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requires
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.
Therefore
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, there is an exam named IELTS to rate volunteers
a
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band of one to nine. In conclusion,
language
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 is one of the most significant things in society.
Moreover
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, with a changing
world
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 order
the
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 innovation of
language
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 is inevitable. The main goal of humanity needs to be
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adapting
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 to the modern
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world
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world's
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 requirements.

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task response
Explain both views clearly and add your own clear opinion at the end.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a topic sentence.
coherence
Use linking words to show the flow between ideas: firstly, also, but, for example, in addition.
language accuracy
Check spelling and grammar. Use simple and short sentences to avoid mistakes.
content development
Give real examples for each point to be more clear.
content
There is a view that technology helps with language use.
content
The topic is about language and world issues.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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