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The map shows the present layout of an post building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The maps show
layout
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the layout
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 of the present plan of
a
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an
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office
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 building and its proposed development in the future
Overall
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, the
office
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space
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 will be expanded for
accomodation
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accommodation
 of additional areas in the building. A few sections will be replaced by others
creating
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, creating
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 more
space
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. In the current plan, there are four
office
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 rooms in the south, and an
entrance
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 in the southeastern part of the building. Meanwhile, there is a toilet just opposite
to
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the southeastern
entrance
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which
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, which
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 is near the storeroom, canteen and the kitchen in the north. The
office
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 building has two green spaces on the east and west
side
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sides
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 of the building ,
out
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apply
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of which the western part is connected to a second
entrance
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. In the proposed plan, the
entrance
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 in
southeastern
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the southeastern
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area
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 will be shifted between two
office
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 rooms in
centre
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the centre
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 of the south. Meanwhile, the spaces designated for the Kitchen and the Canteen will be converted into the other two
office
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 rooms.
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, there will be
expansion
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an expansion
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 of
space
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 by replacing the grass
area
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 on both
the
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apply
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ends with
meeting
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a meeting
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area
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 in
west
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the west
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 and
outside
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an outside
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 seating
area
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 in the east.
Moreover
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,
this
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 additional
space
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 will
also
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accomodate
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accommodate
 toilets and
coffee
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a coffee
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 machine in the northeastern corner.
However
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, the location of
storeroom
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the storeroom
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 will remain unchanged.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, space, entrance, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • present
  • future
  • plan
  • building
  • post office
  • area
  • space
  • room
  • entrance
  • exit
  • door
  • window
  • car park
  • parking
  • yard
  • road
  • path
  • sign
  • counter
  • desk
  • staff
  • customer
  • service
  • work
  • time
  • crowd
  • line
  • bigger
  • new
  • old
  • safe
  • easy
  • clear
  • open
  • bright
  • design
  • build
  • change
  • improve
  • add
  • extend
  • phase
  • cost
  • traffic
  • noise
  • safety
  • access
  • people
  • move
  • area
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