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Band 4

some people believe that taxing is best way to reduce the industrial pollution.While some suggest there are several other ways to solve this trouble. Discuss both the views and give you opinion.

It is believed that
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industrial
pollution
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 is
being affect
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affecting
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 everyone in the world. As
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citizen
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citizens
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 in the world, it is time for us to change the situation recently,
otherwise
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, it may probably cause
unbelieveable
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unbelievable
 consequences.
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, some
people
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 may think that taxing is the best way to reduce
the
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industrial
pollution
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,
while
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 there are several ways to solve the
trouble
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problem
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, like raising
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people
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people's
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environmnental
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environmental
awareness
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. I personally
believed
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believe
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 that the latter one is more effective, and it
is solved
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solves
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 the problem from the roots. From my perspective, raising
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people
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people's
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 environmental
awareness
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 may solve the problem
from
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at
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 the root. It is suggested that the
goverenment
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government
 put more
resourse
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resources
 to do more
promotion
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promoting
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on
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apply
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the
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advertisements
advertisment
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advertisment,
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like
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as
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 the
consequentences
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consequences
 may
caused
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be caused
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 if we
keep
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continue to
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 create
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a lots
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lots
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lot
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 of
the
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pollution
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made
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from industrial activities.
Then
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 the citizen may know more about the
envionment
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environmental
 information, and it may foster them
create
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to create
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 less
pollution
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.
In addition
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,
while
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people
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 increase
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their
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envionmental
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environmental
awareness
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, they may
more
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be more
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 likely to choose some of the
brand
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brands
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that
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is
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are
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environmental-friendly
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, and to spend more money on those shops. So, the brand may
also
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 create
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environmently-friendly
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environmentally-friendly
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 images so that they may
decline
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reduce
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 the damage
on
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to
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 the
envionement
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environment
 to maintain their brand image. Yet, some may think that taxing is
more
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a more
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 practical punishment, and it may let the
industry
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 feel like
lots
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paying lots
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 of money to pay, so they may try not to create
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such
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apply
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more industrial
pollution
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because of saving
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to save
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 large amounts of capital.
Nevertheless
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, I do not totally agree
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this
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with this
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 statement. Nowadays, with the rapid economic development, more
people
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 are able to afford
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a
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 better living quality
, at
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. At
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 the same time, many of those entertainment activities usually create lots of
the
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pollutants. But now, most
people
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,
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 are able to afford most of those products and services.
Therefore
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,
although
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 there are some
punishment
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punishments
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to
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for
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 the
industry
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, the
industry
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then
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increase
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increases
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 the price,
people
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 may still afford
these
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this
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industry
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 because they have more money than the
perivous
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previous
 decades.
To conclude
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, I totally realise that taxing can only
temporary
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temporarily
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 help to reduce
the
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industial
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industrial
pollution
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, but in the long
terms
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term
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, it is
recommend
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recommended
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 that the government should
do
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take
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 more action to raise
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people'
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people's
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envionmental
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environmental
awareness
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.

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planning
Make a clear plan before you write. Start with a short intro that tells the two views and your chosen view. Then write one idea per paragraph with a clear link to the next idea.
structure
Use a clear topic sentence in each paragraph. Each idea should match the question and connect to your view.
development
Give better reason and simple examples. Use facts or small real life notes but keep the language simple and easy.
stance
You show a clear view you prefer awareness work.
coherence
Some link words are used and ideas are tried to be in order.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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