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The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate the main reasons for adolescents in one African country using their mobile devices from 2016 to 2019.
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, over the four-year period, the reasons why teenagers used
cellphones
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 were mainly social
networkings
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networking
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, accounting for half of the population, followed by email services and taking photos.
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, making phone calls occupied the smallest portion. In 2016, social
networkings
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networking
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were
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 the primary cause of teenagers'
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cellphones
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cell phone
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 usage, accounting for 50%.
This
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 figure remained stable for a period
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 before rising to a peak of 56% in 2019.
On the other hand
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, making phone calls remained the least likely reason to use the
cellphones
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. The figure fluctuated over the time period and experienced a big decline in 2019, with only 5%. The percentage of adolescents using
cellphones
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 to access emails fluctuated over the years, peaking at 25% in 2016.
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 for digital cameras, the percentage showed a gradual upward trend, and reached its highest point in 2019 with 20%, surpassing the percentage of accessing email, with 19%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cellphones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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