some unvierstities now offer their courses on the internet so that people can study online . Is this a positive or negative development ?

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online
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course
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in universities has become increasingly
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relevant
. It brings some positive
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for university
students
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, but
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also
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accompanied by numerous
drawbacks
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. I believed that online
course
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brings
negative
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development
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siginficiantly
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. In
this
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essay, I will discuss both the benefits and
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of online
courses
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, and explain why I agree with
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negative
development
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. On
one
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hand, online
courses
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offering
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a lot of benefits for
students
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. It
help
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individuals who
busy
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are busy
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with their studies save
the
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time
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.
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, some
students
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only had a few
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for them to move to their next
course
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. It might take
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of
time
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on transportation because the
course
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it
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take
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at
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place at
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the other campus. If
school
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the school
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online
courses
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,
this
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community can save more
time
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on study
instead
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of transport.
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, it
also
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brings a lot of
drawbacks
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on
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education. Using online
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, student might lack
of
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their
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concentration during the class. Because
teacher
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teachers
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can not see them
face to face
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, it will become harder
for
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to
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control the class's discipline
,
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some people might enter the online classroom but actually not sit in front of the device and listen to the
course
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.
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, during the
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quarantine
, all
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schools
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offer online
class
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classes
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for education, but the results are not beneficial. Lots of
students
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fail
thier
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their
exam because they learn nothing online. In conclusion, I
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that taking
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course
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courses
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online is a negative
development
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. It
do
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does
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not help for the education because of
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students's
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lack of self-control and concentration.
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it has some benefits, the
drawbacks
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are
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outweigh
of
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it
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them
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.

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