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Some parents believe that reading books for entertainment is a waste of children’s time. They think that their children should read only serious educational books. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

The reading, especially in children's
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 is
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 debate nowadays. The views are
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divided
 among the parents. On one hand, some people think that reading is a waste of time.
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 individuals believe that
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reading is
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no
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anymore
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longer
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 an appropriate way to educate the young ones.
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, they consider
pointless the reading
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the reading pointless
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, even if it's for entertainment or educational books. They adhere to the current
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thinking that
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modern society
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in
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a high speed, and that there are other more appropriate ways to educate the students.
On the other hand
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, there are certain that are the supporters of the reading. They embrace the idea that reading develops imagination, language and vocabulary.
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intelectual
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intellectual
 skills, there are other cognitive benefits.
For instance
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, children get
value
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scientifical
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scientific
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informations
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information
.
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is
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 the reasons why some prefer to offer
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special
educatives
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educational
 books
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to children.
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 In my opinion, I would say that any time of books
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 to
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persons's
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 increase. If the book should have a scientific, educational
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, it should depend on the child's interests. In the end, the book most
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recommended
 is the one most loved.

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language
Fix many grammar and spelling mistakes; use plain, clear sentences.
organization
Make a plan before you write: intro, two sides, and a conclusion.
content
Give clear reasons for each side and add simple examples where you can.
cohesion
Use linking words to show order and contrast.
grammar
Keep sentences short and easy to read; check spellings of common words.
content
There is a view for both sides.
organization
The text keeps two parts with 'on one hand' and 'on the other hand'.
structure
You end with your own view.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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