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The graph below shows average house price between 1997 and 2014 in different countries

The graph below shows average house price between 1997 and 2014 in different countries
the
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The
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 line graph below illustrates
average
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the average
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 house
price
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 between 1997 and 2014.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 the data reveal a house
price
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 pattern with
country
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a
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A
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 showing the most significant change over the period.
in
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In
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 terms of the main trends
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country
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, country
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 B and
country
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C
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 followed similar patterns
both
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, both
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 increased
steadly
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steadily
 over time.
By
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contrast
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contrast,
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country a
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Country A
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 experienced a markedly different trend
fluctuating
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, fluctuating
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 throughout ,despite minor changes
it
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, it
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 consistently recorded higher numbers compared to
other
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the other
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 two countries
in
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In
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 the details
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country
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, country
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 A rose from 2000 to
2003
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2003,
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after
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and
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 in
2009
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2009,
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 only minor changes were observed
,
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.
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country
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Country
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 B and
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country
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Country C
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c
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 remained relatively stable between 1997 and 2005
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. Country
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country
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C
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still
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was still
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 stable in 2007
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. In
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in addition
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 to these countries decreased in 2008
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. On
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on the other
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hand
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hand,
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country
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Country
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 B and
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Country C
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C
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 followed similar trends over time . By
contrast
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country
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 A showed a different
price
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 .
it
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It
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 is clear
for
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that
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house
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the house
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price
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prices
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country
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in country
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 A
is
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are
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 more expensive the other countries

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, country, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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