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Social media has many positive uses, but there have been some negative consequences to it as well. Identify a problem caused by social media and describe the solutions you would propose to address this problem.

The existence of social
media
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 has dramatically changed many aspects of life. Almost everyone uses the
media
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 today, with its positive uses.
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, its usage comes with many challenges
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, and
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 one major issue is
cyber bullying
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cyberbullying
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.
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 major problem
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 and solutions to it. Social
media
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 has caused severe problems
people
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that people
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 never knew existed
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, like
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cyber bullying
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cyberbullying
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First,
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users
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 of social platforms misuse
it
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them
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, and create problems from
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them
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. Some
users
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 may post insulting pictures or post negative comments
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 others.
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, parents are left worried and concerned about their
children
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 because of cyberbullying. Many
children
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 are made fun of by social
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, especially kids who go to school.
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,
children
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 are misguided
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 affected mental health for the rest of their
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.
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, influencers have been the most targeted group of cyberbullying. Many influencers have quit
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 career
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 because of the insulting
behavior
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behaviour
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 they receive from certain
users
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also
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lead
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 to ruined reputations of many content creators, which is an extreme downfall of their lives.
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,
this
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 major problem can be treated with several solutions
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it
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apply
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. To start with, any misuse of social
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 specific user will get banned.
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 will ensure
cyberbullying
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that cyberbullying
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 will decrease dramatically with time.
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,
users
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 will feel safer and more comfortable with social
media
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.
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, a specific age group for social
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 would be a great solution.
Children
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 are a concerning age group, and they shouldn't deal with getting bullied at
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 age. So, to prevent
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 issue
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users
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, users
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strictly should be
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should be strictly
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 above fourteen.
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, governments should
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 in
such
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major
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a major
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 problem
of
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in
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 society. Countries can start putting strict laws on cyberbullying by prohibiting it.
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, any user
that
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who
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tempts
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 to insult others gets fined. In conclusion, social
media
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 has insanely changed many aspects of life. With its use comes positive and negative consequences.
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, it is only up to the responsibility of a person
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how
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to effectively use it.

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content
Make a clear plan. Start with the problem, then give 2-3 strong ideas and end with a short wrap up.
content
Give more clear reasons for each idea. Use simple facts or a short example.
coherence
Add better link words to join ideas, to make the flow easy.
grammar
Some long sentences are hard. Break them into shorter lines so it is easy to read.
lexical
Word choice should stay simple. Use words from the top 100 list.
content
The problem is clear and the topic is kept.
structure
There is a plan with intro, body and end.
coherence
Link words are used, like However and To start with.
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