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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

As the digital platform becomes famous, analogue communication is becoming a thing of the past. I tend to agree with
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 because internet access is improving daily , and
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 it's easy to save the information for future reference.
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, in both rural and urban areas, 98 per cent of residents are able to access wifi or purchase bundles at a low cost.
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 has made it difficult to buy
newspapers
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 as one can read the
news
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at
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 the comfort of their home without the need to go to the shopping centre where they are usually sold.
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, a study conducted at Oxford University demonstrated that 60-65 per cent of the
news
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 written in the paper was not bought within the months of March to August.
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, in those months, CNN,
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a modern
 television that broadcasts
news
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 globally, had an increase of viewers from 1.7 million to 3.7 million.
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 shows how people migrated from old ways of getting
updates
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 to digital methods.
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, people prefer something that can be preserved safely. Unlike
newspapers
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 that can get torn easily,
updates
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 we get using our phones can be retrieved easily , and there is no worry of them getting deleted.
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,
this
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 has made the majority of citizens , especially youth ,
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prefer
news
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 on
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gadgets rather than in the papers.
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, research done to compare usage of television for
news
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updates
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 and reading
newspapers
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 in India in 2021 indicated that 95 per cent spent their time on television and not on the paper. In conclusion, the modern world is upgrading in terms of
news
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updates
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and
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, and
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 people are no longer reading
newspapers
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 as before.

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task-response
Be clear about your view in the first line and keep it simple through the essay.
task-response
Add a second point even if you agree. Show both sides a little to reach balance.
supporting-ideas
Use real and clear facts. If you write numbers, check they are right and easy to trust.
coherence
Link your ideas with simple words like 'also', 'but', 'then' and 'because' to ease flow.
structure
Make topic sentences for each paragraph and end with a short wrap up.
content
The essay shows a clear view and a simple plan.
content
The writer uses some examples to back a point.
content
There is a good attempt to explain why digital news can replace paper.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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