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Write a short letter to your friend, who also visit often this cafe In your letter write your feelings and recommendations

Hello Shirina I was in a cafe today
and
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 I want to tell you about my visit. The service sometimes came aloqa but sometimes fast top.
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example
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example,
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 today my erini
come
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came
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quick
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quickly
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but
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, but
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 the food came
slow
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slowly
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. The waiter
answer
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answered
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 my questions
but
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, but
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 not always with a smile
he
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. He
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look
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looked
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 a little tired. All of their new meals are perfect
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 I can say one thing without doubt
they
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: they
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 have great cooking ability .
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Also
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 the cafe's
facilitate
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facilities
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and
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, and
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 its atmosphere
was
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were
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 very well. I recommend you to go there
because
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because,
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 as I've
Said
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said
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it
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apply
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before
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before,
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 it was really EXCELLENT!

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greeting closing
Add a clear closing line and your name to the letter.
coherence structure
Break long text into short lines or new paragraph for each idea.
language accuracy
Try to fix big word choices and use simple words from the top 100.
content
You tell how you feel and you give a clear idea to friend.
tone
The tone shows you are happy with the cafe.
structure
You say you would tell your friend to go there.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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