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Creative artists should always be given freedom to express their own ideas (in words, music, pictures or films) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Artists
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 demonstrate their own
ideas
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 through words, music, pictures, or films to tell compelling stories
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, sometimes they should set boundaries and respect limits regarding gender and culture because everyone is proud of their identity.
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 is especially true given that the government has an important role in regulating all
ideas
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 relating to cultural or gender issues. To
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artists
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 have the advantage of complete artistic freedom, they should exercise their freedom responsibly
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to present or encourage creativity and innovation.
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example
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, new music genres and revolutionary art movements are equally important for presenting their own
ideas
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 directly to the audience or the audience.
if
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artistic
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 promotes cultural and social awareness in order that presenting what
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 showcase to the world
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is
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take
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 pride in showcasing
performance
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performances
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 by producers.
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example
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, Films or books highlighting social issues (e.g., racism, climate change).
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Furthermore
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,
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 government must impose limitations inasmuch as the
artists
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 present their own
ideas
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causes
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cause
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 harm or illegal activity.
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: hate speech, violent
content
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, or propaganda.
given
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 that performances presented by children or Impressionable groups and Vulnerable to copycat
behavior
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 provided
that
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content
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 must be subject to government control.
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, the state has to protect public morals and societal values since those groups are sensitive to
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performance
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 shall be subject to state regulation
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example
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 ,Age-appropriate ratings for films and music, laws against obscene
content
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. In conclusion ,
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 partially agree
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artists
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 should have the freedom to express
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apply
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 their own
ideas
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,
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, everything presented through media or society so that consequences
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 the audience.
as
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 long as
artists
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 have
out of
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humanity and empathy for others, one should reflect carefully before showcasing their work to the public.

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planning
Plan what you want to say. Use a clear start, body with 2-3 ideas, and a short end.
language
Use short and simple sentences. Check grammar so ideas are easy to read.
coherence
Make each idea clear and link it to the next with words like and, but, also, yet.
content
The writer tries to talk about both sides of the issue.
content
Some examples are given to support ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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