The table below shows expenditures of four car companies on advertising in the UK in 2002.

The table illustrates expenditures of four car companies on advertising in the UK in 2002
, there
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. There
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are five types of advertising
,
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Press,
Cinema
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, Outdoor, Radio and
TV
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.
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, all of the companies
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the most on
the
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apply
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TV
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, and
also
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they spend the same on the Radio.
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, they
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similar output on the Outdoor and the
Cinema
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.
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, for the Press, half of them put a lot on it
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others
doesn't
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don't
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. First of all, the
TV
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,
Cetirizine
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spends 70
million
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, which is the highest. And in order, Vauxhall spend 65
million
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,
Renault
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spends 59
million
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.
Rover
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is the one which
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the least on
TV
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, for 45
million
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.
Furthmore
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Furthermore
, all of them
spends
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spend
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15
million
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on the Radio. And
also
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, each of them spends less money on both Outdoor and
Cinema
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. Both
Renault
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and Vauxhall
spends
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spend
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7
million
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on Outdoor,
Cetirizine
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spends 3
milion
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million
, and
Rover
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spend
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spends
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the least again over the four companies,
for
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2
million
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. For
Cinema
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,
Renault
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spends the most on it, for 6
milion
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million
, and
then
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Vaxhall
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Vauxhall
is the
nest
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next
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, for 5
million
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. Both
Rover
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and
Cetirizine
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spend nothing on it.
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, they
has
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significant
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a significant
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difference
on
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Press.
Renault
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and
Rover
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spends
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spent
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45
million
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and 38
milion
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million
on it, which are the second
high
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they
spend
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spent
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on advertising.
However
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,
Cetirizine
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spends 12
million
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, and Vauxhall only spend 8
million
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on it.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, tv, cetirizine, million, renault, rover with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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