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The table below shows the number of full-time students from India who studied at various universities in the UK in 2020/21 and 2021/22.

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Indian
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universities
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 in the UK in 2020/21 and 2021/22.
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the largest number of
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university
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 the least studied at the Sheffield
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university
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universities
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 did not experience
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 changes from each
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, meanwhile the other two were at the same
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university
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2020/21
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Coventry, Greenwich and BPP
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 studied from 2,300 to 3,500
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2021/22
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 figures were from 4,500 to 5,200. Mostly changes
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;Coventry and Greenwich
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 little difference in 2,900.
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1,640.The percentage of increase in
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Coventry
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 was 121.3%, in the Greenwich
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Anglia Ruskin and Leicester
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 1,925 and 1,175,
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respectively
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/21
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students
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 (815), but by
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2021/22 the
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 were about 2,300. At
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Anglia Ruskin and Leicester
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 educated from 2,390 to 3,265. The changes were at the same
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 around 1,300. The percentage of
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at the Sheffield
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 with 187.7%,
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 with 103,4. One of the smallest
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had
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 Anglia Ruskin
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 with 69,6. 

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