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Band 3

Culture around the world has become more similar to the other countries then it was before. State reasons, example and conclude if it is a positive or negative trend?

Culture is different in each country , every side of the globe has
it is
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its
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 own ideas , and other
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way
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ways
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 of living.In
this
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essay
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assay
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 the cultural changes
aling
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along
 the years and the similarity will be
discucced
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discussed
. People in the past
were living
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lived
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 in their countries with no interactions with others
in
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on
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 the other side
, it
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. It
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 was difficult to know the
world
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 news and what they
are practising
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practised
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 and
the
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their
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way
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 of living.All of that
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due
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was due
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 to
lack
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a lack
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 of technology, television,
also
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 it was
hard
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also hard
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 to travel and visit other
poeple
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people
 in the
world
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 .
In addition
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, back
then
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 community
waas
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was
 living in
smaal
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small
 areas with limited information, and
lack
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a lack
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 of
knowladge
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knowledge
, education.
Moreover
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, with all of
that
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those
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 factors
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differently
diffintly
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diffintly,
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 it
effect
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affects
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 the
way
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 they see the
world
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 and
afraid
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are afraid
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 to try new things or
going
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go
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 to new places.
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,in the present we had lots of opportunities to know other
community
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communities
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 around the globe ,
also
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 get
introduce
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introduced
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 to other cultures.
For example
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, technology
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along
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, along
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 with social
media
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media,
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have
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has
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 contributed to
reach
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reaching
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 others who
lives
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live
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faraway
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far away
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 in different cities
knowing
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, knowing
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 their cultures and the
way
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 of living ,
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the name
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name
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names
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 of the cities and what they look
and
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like and
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 what they wear. In conclusion, with all of
this
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 technology and
transproting
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transportation
inflations
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inflation
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, it is easy to know and travel to other countries and know
thier
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their
 cultures .Which is fascinating and
make
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makes
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community
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the community
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 all over the
world
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 stand with
eachother
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each other
 in
critical
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a critical
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 crisis.

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grammar
Improve grammar and sentence form to reduce errors.
structure
Plan a clear two part structure: intro, body with 2-3 points, and a short conclusion.
lexical
Use simple but correct words; check spellings and punctuation.
coherence
Make each paragraph focus on one idea; use linking words to show flow.
examples
Add stronger examples and explain how they support your point.
structure
The essay has a clear topic and a conclusion.
ideas
There is some attempt to discuss past and present and the effect of tech.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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